One more time, let the criticism fly...

Doug Parks · **Voice Talent** Joined: 06 Jul 2007 Posts: 227

These are three complete spots that are probably going on my website. Please check them out and let me have it!! Thanks.

Lee Kanne · **Voice Talent** Joined: 20 Dec 2005 Posts: 129

Doug,

I'm not an expert by any stretch of the imagination, but I have to be honest and say these spots don't work for me.

there are a few instances where words are getting swallowed and it's a little mushy..like the first spot, about 3 or 4 seconds in....I didn't get initially that you were stating a guys's name.

in the first spot I was getting the impression you were sort of doing a parody of a traditional announcer, and I don't think this was intentional on your part, but correct me if I'm wrong.

So to my ears, your spots are coming across kind of announcery and not ringing true. It's especially evident in the last spot.

I think you are kind of stuck in a "what I think it should sound like"
mode, instead of just approaching it very naturally and conversationally. Like I said, it's really apparent in the last spot where your emotion did not ring true to me at all.

It needs a tune up, not a major overhaul.... you have all the tools to make it happen.

Doug Parks · **Voice Talent** Joined: 06 Jul 2007 Posts: 227

Thanks Lee. I appreciate your taking the time.