Critique needed from your trained ear

Jeff Judge · **Voice Talent** Joined: 22 May 2006 Posts: 2

Just wanted a little eagerly awaited feedback on my demo from someone other than myself.

I can take it.

Sid Whatley · Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008, 01:09 (GMT) Post subject:

From an old salty here. Frist impression (which is the most important). 2 distince deliverys.....low and warm/young and serious. Both well done. But each example is too long. Edit it down to 60secs and have aprox. 6 to 8 or so quick examples. You choice as to which delivery (low warm or young) you want the producers to hear first......because THAT'S what they will remember. The first 6secs are the most important. Good luck and welcome.

The file took a long time to download so you might consider using a lower quality (64kbps) that still sounds good.

Robert Jadah · **Voice Talent** Joined: 17 Jun 2005 Posts: 2627

Welcome to the fish bowl, Jeff; here's listening to ya'.

I think I'm kind'a agreeing with Sid (and he knows), but I'll go a step further. It sounds to me like you're trying to be too many things here.
It's like Kevin Federline doing the stock-market report.
Your opening Harley spot, for example, is duller than a Mr. Ed (ask your parents) rerun, and just screams for the STOP button. But then you do a nice Cheese and Bacon and a very solid Smoke Kills.

My suggestion would be to find your niche (probably young-ish and semi-excited), and then stitch together a demo with your strengths.
I mean, why showcase what you can't do?

Voice On!

Sid Whatley · Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008, 02:11 (GMT) Post subject:

Yessss Jeff.......start off with the "Cheese & Bacon" bit. Leave the Harley's behind. Shorten all of them and just give us a "snippit" of each. Save the long examples for your narrative or specialty demo.

Jeff Judge · **Voice Talent** Joined: 22 May 2006 Posts: 2

Thanks Sid and Robert.
That is certainly constructive and something I can start on right away. Much appreciated!